The narrative has some misinformation (Trout are not the "main species" of the Hudson, and the water is not always "very cold"). You need to work on basic grammar and paragraphing. This paragraph as a lot of different subjects and needs subdividing.
I don't hear anything about your interest in the Hudson - what connects you to the River - why is it important? Hudson is always capitalized since it is a name of a place. The writing mostly seems copied which is not at all good. Do some more research and make this page relevant and interesting to read. Your picture does not show and must be redone. You need to link cites not just in your references.
The Hudson River
The Hudson is a huge body of water. It is 315 miles long from the Adirondacks at Lake Tear of the Clouds to the New York Harbor. The actual Hudson River begins several miles north of Tahawus at Henderson Lake. Then the Hudson joins to Troy by the Mohawk River. Then just south of which the Federal Dam separates the Upper Hudson River Valley from the Lower Hudson River Valley. Sometimes the Hudson River is called the " drowned" river because of the rising sea levels.
The major trout streams are the Esopus Creek and the Catskill Creek. The best fishing for bass in the Hudson is between Newburgh and Albany. The Hudson rivers population of fish is helped by the Tivoli South Bay’s Hudson Ri
ver National Estuarine Research Reserve. This reserve studies the water and helps the fish by having a spawning and a nursery area for them.
I love going to the Hudson and i think it is so amazing how large it is. I wish that people would take care of it better. Its one of our main water supply so we need to try to keep it clean for our own good. We could set up more garbage cans around the Hudson. So there would be a better chance that people wont just throw their garbage into the river but throw it into the garbage can. The Hudson is very important to our ecosystem.
The narrative has some misinformation (Trout are not the "main species" of the Hudson, and the water is not always "very cold"). You need to work on basic grammar and paragraphing. This paragraph as a lot of different subjects and needs subdividing.
I don't hear anything about your interest in the Hudson - what connects you to the River - why is it important? Hudson is always capitalized since it is a name of a place. The writing mostly seems copied which is not at all good. Do some more research and make this page relevant and interesting to read. Your picture does not show and must be redone. You need to link cites not just in your references.
The Hudson River
The Hudson is a huge body of water. It is 315 miles long from the Adirondacks at Lake Tear of the Clouds to the New York Harbor. The actual Hudson River begins several miles north of Tahawus at Henderson Lake. Then the Hudson joins to Troy by the Mohawk River. Then just south of which the Federal Dam separates the Upper Hudson River Valley from the Lower Hudson River Valley. Sometimes the Hudson River is called the " drowned" river because of the rising sea levels.
The major trout streams are the Esopus Creek and the Catskill Creek. The best fishing for bass in the Hudson is between Newburgh and Albany. The Hudson rivers population of fish is helped by the Tivoli South Bay’s Hudson Ri
ver National Estuarine Research Reserve. This reserve studies the water and helps the fish by having a spawning and a nursery area for them.
I love going to the Hudson and i think it is so amazing how large it is. I wish that people would take care of it better. Its one of our main water supply so we need to try to keep it clean for our own good. We could set up more garbage cans around the Hudson. So there would be a better chance that people wont just throw their garbage into the river but throw it into the garbage can. The Hudson is very important to our ecosystem.
A view of the Bear Mountain Bridge over the Hudson River.
Picture Source:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:Bear_Mtn_Bridge.jpg
Resources :Cite
1. http://www.clearwater.org/hudson.html
2. http://www.flyfishingconnection.com/nyupperhudson.html
3. http://gorp.away.com/gorp/location/ny/fis_hudv.htm